To
start with, we can show respects to people by using “Jon-dae-mal”. The best way
of expressing feelings would be by directly telling them. There indeed are many
situations that we better show some kind of respect. And in this perspective “Jon-dae-mal”
is the perfect grammar rule that able us to show respect to people easily. Example
of respecting others by using honorific expressions would be respecting
elderly. Showing respects to elders are showing respects to their past
experience and knowledge. It is true that society is changing continually and
rapidly and elders’ ideas may not fit in to current situations. However, there
is always something to learn from the past. Since elders had experienced more
and know more they can be best advisors for young. Beside the fact that there
are a lot to learn from elders, also the reason that we can exist, and live in
this country, culture, and home is all thanks to them. In these aspects it
seems fair to get some respects. So, Korean uses “Jon-dae-mal” towards elders
as showing respects, and to others if it is needed.
Moreover,
using “Jon-dae-mal” makes us to think one more time. Not only that we use “Jon-dae-mal”
to express our feelings, especially respectfulness, Using “Jon-dae-mal” works
other way around, effecting us in positive ways. For example, if lovers use “Jon-dae-mal”
to each other, “Jon-dae-mal” would effects their attitude, they would think one
more time before they say something, and they would be more respectful to each
other. Those will be lower the rate of being in trouble. Not only the
relationships between lovers, but in many kinds of relationships, using “Jon-dae-mal”
would help out a lot. It would help them to maintain good relationships since
using “Jon-dae-mal” makes you think one more time before they actually say it. More
importantly “Jon-dae-mal” has basic feature that makes the listener feel good.
It is quite obvious since “Jon-dae-mal” includes the speaker’s respect towards
the listener. Since in today’s society we get to make various relationships, in
online, and in offline it is really important to make good relationships and
maintain it well. And as I introduced earlier, using Korean “Jon-dae-mal” would
be very effective in maintaining and having good emotions towards each other
when we make relationships.
To
conclude, usage of “Jon-dae-mal” is a Korean tradition with various useful
features. Language indeed is really close to our life. Every second, in any
place, in order to communicate we use “language” to express our emotions, and
ideas. And the change of language usage would tremendously effect one’s life.
Usage of “Jon-dae-mal” in this case, would surely change one’s life in positive
ways. As I listed few positive features about Korean “Jon-dae-mal” above, “Jon-dae-mal”
is a custom from my country that I would mostly like people from other
countries to adopt.
You were successful in terms of illustrating advantages of 존댓말 in a very effective way. You seemed to totally understand your stance and it was actually shown in your essay. However, you didn't explain how other countries can adopt this custom. All the countries possess their own cultures and languages and it might be very difficult for them to adopt this custom all of a sudden. Thus, you were a little out of the topic which you had to focus on. Still, structure-wise, your essay is pretty organized and balanced. Also, your ideas were logical encough to pursuade readers. Excellent!
답글삭제I think 존댓말 is excellent Korean culture and it is worth to introduce to other countries. But, I think adopting 존댓말 in the countries except Korea will be so difficult. So, it seems that your essay is not very persuasive. If you had suggested the way to adopt 존댓말 culture into others, it could have been perfect essay.
답글삭제You have excellent skills in writing an essay. Your topic is not unique, but I found that your essay is the most efficient one among the essays on 존댓말. Still, being not unique can be a disadvantage. But I don't agree with the the comment above, because adopting our culture is already unrealistic. Your logical structure is very nice. There are some sentences that are not actually needed to be said again, and using more reasons and examples would be better. In a nutshell, it's organized and logical essay.
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